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    dots Submission Name: Watch Closelydots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWatch Closelydots
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    Watch Closely

    I may turn away
    And play pretend
    When I know that you have
    No hand to lend

    You don't see me
    All the while you stare
    You're searching for someone
    I've always been there

    Someone to trust
    Someone who's true
    Someone who'd give
    His whole world for you

    If you'd settle your eyes
    Allow focus to stay
    Your search would then end
    I'm here everyday

    It's not very hard
    To fall head over heels
    With fire and passion
    From how your love feels

    I'll never betray
    I'll never hold back
    I'll love you always
    I promise you that

    So throughout your search
    For a love that is true
    And you're looking through me
    Know my eyes are on you




    Submitted on 2011-06-20 14:34:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Such a familiar theme--the desire to be noticed by the object of one's desire. As Jacob said, a nice straightforward write.~C
    | Posted on 2011-06-20 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the honesty of this piece...and in its simplicity, it reads smoothly and the sentiment lies bare...pretty straightforward...but a nice love poem...it is a style...and you do this one well...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-06-20 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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