i love the word play in the title here, which really kinda sends it home for me y'know? also, i think this was submitted a really long time ago... wasnt it? if not, i may have imagined this piece on eliteskills during its hayday... ahh those were the days eh.
but it would be hella cool if i imagined it in the past and now get to comment on this in the present. oh paradoxes are so silly. i did make a mobius strip once or twice in the past because of this. keep trippin mate. and dont listen to trinity finger... he's a nutter!
I imagined that once, didn't come down for a week.
So are we part of a digital universe? Is the whole meat
puppet thing an illusion? A vibrating string? Do we exist as a strum or the interlude between? I am afraid my mind
has entered a mental menopause and I for one exist only as a hot flash in the night.
Lovely as usual. So here's my "unspecified" commentary. I love the meter of this. The consistency is lovely, I struggle with maintaining meter on occasion because I simply want to write outside the lines. I am enthralled when I see someone do it well. It's a bit like Robert Frost meets sci-fi...an intriguing mix indeed. I've never heard a "möbius strip" mentioned in a poem, so it caught my immediate interest and made a statement.
"Such parlor trick of math inclines
to sometimes mess with people's minds
unseeming knowledge dost perverse
the flip that rules this universe"
Upon first read I thought I did not like this stanza, but I reread it and discovered I really did. The slant of the rhyme of the first two line threw me at first, but I wouldn't change it. I love the wit of this stanza and any changes would mess with it's lovely wit.
I also enjoyed the last two lines of the poem. I've read extensively about string theory and believe it is completely plausible. Not sure if that was the reference that you were making, but that's how I read it. The possibility of different dimensions and how to access them is intoxicating. I read somewhere that they believe our universe is shaped like a soccer ball, with panels that allow us to come in on the opposite side which we entered. They also say that there is a place in the universe where we can no longer use radio waves to create images, all that comes back is static. In any case, the universe is an interesting place. Thank you for sharing this piece which has made me think so much.
Submission Name: Mobius Trip
