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    dots Submission Name: I feel like you're gone alreadydots
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    Author: EEKS
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    Words: 82
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    dotsI feel like you're gone alreadydots
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    I feel hopeless but strong to the bone, I miss you like gaping for air, like freezing cold
    And this is when I realized I could make it, right when I saw that you couldn't take it

    You keep saying you're not leaving but I feel you
    Slipping through my fingers like air, I can't even touch you, wherever you are
    I have this feeling that I need you, some days I think I breathe you, but I can make it




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