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    dots Submission Name: I don't know who I am anymore.dots
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    Author: Carosuel
    ASL Info:    26/F/Twirlwind
    Elite Ratio:    4.93 - 96/73/28
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 980
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 493



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       Why is everyone in such a rush to get married? I'll tell you something, it's not worth anything. I don't understand, how do you lose that fire? Where does it go?


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    dotsI don't know who I am anymore.dots
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    However simple, every bent word,
    molded by your bitter tongue,
    each has a blade's edge,
    every single one.
    Here I am vulnerable,
    love-shackled, and unfortunately,
    always in your way.
    No more than a splinter,
    a creak, a crack, and then...
    my foundation is done in.

    I expect no more,
    and I expect no less.
    I'll tell you something,
    I hardly know what I can accept.






    Submitted on 2011-06-22 00:56:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sad to say but I am in every word in here. I really like the last two lines of the first stanza. I can relate to this and I must say this is written very well.
    | Posted on 2012-10-31 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      When you marry Eeyore, you get a lot of mood swings.
    | Posted on 2011-08-24 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      "I used to wake up drowning in your long dark hair
    Bleeding from my eyelids, you kept a dagger there"

    My words from a poem. Keep up the good work kid. Don't let anyone stop you!
    | Posted on 2011-08-24 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Believe me when i say that i understand, i choose to get married because i thought we loved each other but i was being childish and he left me for another women. i was left wondering why i wasn't the one, why i wasn't good enough, what i did wrong, why he lost faith in me, where the fire went in our relationship, he left and i got left behind. It hurt so much i thought i was dying but i looked at my daughter and realized that he wasn't worth losing myself for....anyway i hope that its not that kind of trouble your having this is just how i related to it. thank you i liked reading this.
    ~Jess~
    | Posted on 2011-06-27 00:00:00 | by gothicgirl | [ Reply to This ]


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