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    dots Submission Name: An angel lostdots
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    Author: snacky fish
    ASL Info:    31/male/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 377/472/111
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsAn angel lostdots
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    In the darkest of groves
    Echoes howls and woes
    An angel lost
    Within this hedge maze

    Since ancient days
    Under countless moon rays
    An angel lost
    With monsters and sprites

    In the longest of nights
    Chased by wailing frights
    An angel lost
    Within a fairy tale tragic

    Not rune nor old magic
    Can ease her quiet panic
    An angel lost
    With giests and trolls

    In the park of lost souls
    The grounds keeper collects tolls
    An angel lost
    With out purse or token

    Holding a heart ever broken
    Lips uttering a name unspoken
    An angel lost
    Within this hedge maze

    In the garden of dire ways
    Upon pale knees she prays
    An angel lost
    With sobs for her vow

    Her wings scattered now
    Along with hope charged to endow
    An angel lost
    With scars so eternal and finite

    In a permanent prison of twilight
    With ghouls and blackest blight
    An angel lost
    Could not see the choice for the cost




    Submitted on 2011-06-22 01:06:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like the structure of this piece and how you were able to be consistent, that the word choice complimented the subject and provoked the imagination all at the same time.

    Thanks for sharing
    Jaz
    | Posted on 2011-08-02 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Happy day Wesley!

    This was an interesting pieces and I liked your rhyme scheme.

    Great!

    Smiles to Share ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-07-05 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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