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    dots Submission Name: Len Biasdots
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    Author: DocTaylor88
    Elite Ratio:    1.02 - 6/3/10
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    The things that take away distance,

    Cleanse cold, hallowed hands.

    Liberation-

    As liberation's of a defeated man gleam at the sight of winters glare.

    I am not gentle, nor am I fair.
    I am not here, nor am I there.
    I cannot fear, what I can't fare.
    And are willing. So seven are there. And these are 7. Seven names that bare. The world's most diligent and victorious spare.




    Submitted on 2011-06-23 22:39:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this. You have something going here. But it needs a bit more from you. Try to expand it a bit. It needs a new ending. Something to sit in juxtaposition with the rest of the poem, to offer some contrast...

    Keep writing!

    I've just posted some new stuff. Any feedback would be highly appreciated!
    | Posted on 2011-07-03 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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