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    dots Submission Name: Intoxiconcoction dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 235
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsIntoxiconcoction dots

    Are there any human stories left
    To set the fires in our heart
    Have we walked across the coals
    In faith
    Or turned the cinders of our weeping
    Into blood

    And they said that man is sleeping
    Beneath the imprisoned eyelash of a woman
    And we had nothing left to share
    We had nothing left to dare
    As if we were buried beneath her tears
    Of misunderstood

    Was it those tactile fingertips
    Told us there was so much more than this
    A coloured voodoo, and if you do
    And only if you will to
    Could you
    Reach between their touch
    And break the salted seal; of a kiss

    And less would be the life we lead and all we need
    Would be
    Far too much

    So you follow in the paper chase
    The tatter and the fritter in a life of waste
    Battering at the sinew
    Of some illusive intoxication spelled out in all the syllables of

    L .
    E …

    It’s not that you don’t have the time to dream
    But all our dreams are filled with pain
    Beneath the presence of almighty God
    Have we ever stopped to question what
    And why
    We all live in fear so much

    Driven by the concocted spell
    Of life’s never ending death

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      Good writing on this. It could use some more editing and polish but it's good as it is too...
    | Posted on 2011-06-30 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]

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