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    dots Submission Name: Drudge Muddots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDrudge Muddots
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    A story plays on a reel projecting a thousand copies of a single message by everyone who watches the play-

    It moves from inside her heart
    To her thoughts
    And eventually this is the energy by which she moves her hands

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    Inside her a broken mirror,
    continually reflecting skewed images of things she has done

    Directing her towards a future
    that she Will make mistakes

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    God, it is still so much about faith

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    Feels helpless to circumstance, truly she understands that sometimes Whispers in her mind become voices,
    saying just what she does not want to hear




    Submitted on 2011-06-24 09:32:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a nice write. Loved the images. I like how the message is giving her energy at the beginning to do things and I'm guessing going about her daily activities. Also, I'm guessing the person you are writing about doesn't seem distressed to people encountering her - what makes me think that is how you describe the inside of her from what you said at the beginning. "God, it is still so much about faith" - that's a cool line, by saying God you automatically point out the point of how for you it is about faith and you reiterate it. Cool. Wasn't sure if the whispers were positive or negative - that's the only thing.
    | Posted on 2011-06-28 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]


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