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    dots Submission Name: Quickly Running Throughdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 467
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    dotsQuickly Running Throughdots
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    Carefully crafted
    dangling
    misjudged,
    perceived from
    another angle completely
    tangled
    webb inside webb
    masses, massive
    great
    thankful
    injustice over see
    over sight
    comfort
    compatibility
    terrible tortured
    just met introduction to the principle of peace
    too many different ideas in spirit
    guided by a holy light
    seperate
    distinguished
    forshadowed
    uncertain
    unfaithful
    drink the whine
    whine
    complain
    begg
    ask
    petition
    pray
    seek
    pursue
    leave
    rest, never rest
    aggrivated
    or appraised
    seeking approval
    fingernail
    deep inside me scraping and scraping until I cannot stand the pain




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      At first glance it might seem like some randomness - but the first line tells the reader that it is "Carefully crafted". This could lead the mind in a different direction with each read - a piece that could grow if a reader wants it to. Let's see now . . . the "webb inside webb" is another indicator of the depth that this could go for the reader. Going back a bit, the "misjudged" part is also nicely put . . . takes me to the title "Quickly Running Through" - if you are too quick to judge then you will misjudge and the part about perspective and how things seem tangled at the wrong angle. Hmm . . . the rest seems to go in the direction (not that the first part didn't start it) of the constant bombardment of emotions, thoughts, feelings, and things we have to deal with brought on by our minds, lives, society, etc. The last part says to me that if you don't quiet the mind it will drive you mad. The point I guess I got was slow down, quiet the mind, observe, take the time appreciate beauty and find meaning, and you will find what you are looking for. I suppose.
    | Posted on 2011-06-28 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]


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