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    dots Submission Name: Crazy Love Never Lastsdots
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    Author: gothicgirl
    ASL Info:    23/f/recreant world
    Elite Ratio:    3.49 - 127/111/48
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 683
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1248



    Description:
       we are finally free from each other!


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    dotsCrazy Love Never Lastsdots
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    I held on to a promise that we made,
    a promise we both could never keep
    You were a man I loved
    I was a women you once fell for
    but days grew crazy
    and nights grew cold
    I watched you run away
    as I clung to you
    Pleading for you to hold me
    for you to care.

    A shadow of hope
    but shadows never change
    A moment
    a smile
    lost to lips of another love
    I can never be

    We played pretend
    shells of what we believed
    was a mother and father
    a husband and a wife
    we were never meant to be
    love was lost on us
    we were lost
    but crazy love never lasts.

    My tears once fell for you,
    my heart once belonged to you,
    and as we descended in to hell
    change was inevitable
    your faith faded and hate collided with anger, regrets were made
    and sadness evolved into spite
    a quick spiral downward,
    never ending,
    promises of change never met,
    just fingers pointing to one another
    blaming
    and in the end there is no shame just an end we were worthy of,
    an end we both deserved.




    Submitted on 2011-06-24 11:04:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this, It seems like in the first stanza you accept that you "loved him" and he "fell for" you....for some reason that sticks in my mind as a separation of emotion.....love and lust etc.

    I really liked the emotion in this piece.

    Nice write,

    WarmGun
    | Posted on 2011-07-26 00:00:00 | by WarmGun | [ Reply to This ]
      Hm.. I can somehow relate to this. Although I've been mostly on the other end of the stick, so to speak. :) The poem itself still needs some work though. It feels a bit like a vent.

    I like your picture. You're very cute! :)
    | Posted on 2011-07-03 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      "and in the end ...and end we were worthy of"

    yes, we made what we had, we made our own bed and we now need to lie in it or not...but we created the good and the bad...no one else's fault...
    i like the acceptance in this...

    the confessional style...reminds me of the tone of anne sexton or denise levertov....

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-06-25 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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