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    dots Submission Name: Dead Jealousdots

    Author: Runes
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    dotsDead Jealousdots

    Being very concerned once with death, I begged
    "Will I see you again after we die?" and you,
    the asshole you were, cocked your head and said,
    "I planned to break up with you, after this life."

    "I'd like to meet Marilyn Monroe," you said,
    and hearing that, I was completely crushed.
    "I think in the next life, I'll date other people..."
    All I heard was, I just don't love you enough.

    I spent all autumn crying, and all winter angry.
    I knew when I needed you most, you'd be gone.
    But if you find Marilyn, go on and date her.
    I'd probably be happier with Al Capone.

    Submitted on 2011-06-25 01:41:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Significant Others can be cruel at times - maybe they don't realize it - maybe they're selfish - maybe they don't feel as we do. I could really identify with this piece. It reminds me of when I asked this guy to write me a poem. I waited and waited - and finally he said he wrote "a" poem. I was elated and breathless as I waited, thinking it was for me - as I wrote him tons of poems. Well... it turned out the poem was about a squirrel he watched run across the street while he was sitting in his car. I still asked to read it. He said he lost it. It hurt so much.
    | Posted on 2011-06-25 00:00:00 | by awaywithwords | [ Reply to This ]
      This is kind of funny. N is so concerned about what potentially might happen after death that it affects her ‘real life’ relationship.

    We hear what we want to hear and react /overreact accordingly.

    The slant rhymes are nice and subtle, although I would call ‘gone’/’Capone’ more sight-rhyme than slant.
    I enjoyed this—gave me a chuckle. ~Chris
    | Posted on 2011-06-25 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      And you told me you thought Atilla was a hazard , all I wanted was a peek not a romance .

    | Posted on 2011-06-25 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi there Runes You still fascinate me that is true. Well as a believer as well as known to other deities and locomotion, I believe sister Marlyn is out of bounds and godfather olde Capone in chains he did not bargain for. So dear Runes rest easy.
    In Heaven there is no dating no marriage no sorrow no nothing of this world. Cheer up dear Runes - in Heaven you maybe the envy of them all.
    Mayhap you do not believe this? Well wait and see for yourself.
    regards joachim
    | Posted on 2011-06-25 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      "drop the gun, take the cannoli"

    but he'll have to get past the Kennedys before he can get to marilyn...

    and i hope you find Al and not an empty vault...

    love can be so disappointing sometimes.
    | Posted on 2011-06-25 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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