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    dots Submission Name: Slush Puppy dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 276
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    dotsSlush Puppy dots

    “ You know; you look like someone else ”
    Was the first thing she said
    I never did ask, just who, I reminded her of

    Say romance fornicated in the guttering of a candle
    And its flame lay in all the rivulets of melted wax

    We were the twin coupling of paper straws
    As we sipped the sweet nectar
    And our tongues lay heavy laden with its sugar

    So we basked in the reflection
    Of each others mirror

    It still troubles me
    How in one another’s puppetry
    We were just so much the condensation of syrup
    Clinging cold to the cardboard cup

    And even though our fingers
    Could have shamed the bonfires we built
    We were nothing more than a mirage
    On the horizons of love

    Promise me your soul in forever wants
    Between the sheets of passion and someone else

    All wept in falsehoods with the petals of lilies
    And heavy laden tongue now lay split in iron railings

    “ You know, you remind me of someone ”

    It troubles me still
    How we sank with such poetic and tragic quills
    Deep to the depths of our own dark inkwells

    Never having breached onto a naked shore

    Never having ever really, truly, held each other

    We were a spasm, a searching for
    Alluding to a succinct intonation of meaning
    Written playful, colourful on headlines and posters
    Fast food prerequisites
    To fill the emptiness

    Momentarily in some desperation of sincerity
    We shared each other’s
    Slush Puppy

    Submitted on 2011-06-25 10:47:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Tingly. I love it. It had a very.. red feel to it. Passionate with undertones of confusion, longing, and regret.
    I love the line, "You know, you remind me of someone."
    Brings up some old emotions for me.
    This was a fantastic write.

    Keep up the good work and I'll keep reading.

    | Posted on 2011-06-29 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought it was really good!
    Strangely romantic and very poetic
    | Posted on 2011-06-25 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]

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