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    dots Submission Name: Twinkle Little Stardots
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    Author: Squall Leon Hea
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    Words: 354
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    dotsTwinkle Little Stardots
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    " twinkle twinkle little star "

    " how I wonder what you are "



    A nursery rhyme kids grew on and off, except one...

    A boy of 10 years old...

    He believed in dreams and wishing upon a star for his dreams to come true...

    Every night he would sit on the side of the bed and looking out to the sky and watch the stars as they glow...

    One in particular it would glow so bright it would fill his heart with hopeand dreams... He start to call out to that star...

    " twinkle twinkle little star "

    " how I wonder what you are "

    The boy would stop and begin to wish and wish hard from the bottom of his young innocent heart...

    Everyday he would do the same and never ended the nursery rhyme...

    The boy grew up and yet still called to that star, he believed in it so much...

    He is now in college and one day studied about the space and stars and was disappointed, learning stars don't live forever...

    That night he would go to the side of his bed and look out of the window and call out...

    This night that star grew dim, it's light starting to fade the boy's eyes would tear up as he looked and he would call out to that star again...

    " twinkle twinkle little star "

    " how I wonder what you are "

    " up above the sky so high "

    " like a diamond in the sky "

    " twinkle twinkle little star "

    " how I wonder what you are "

    As he finished the boy would lay his head on the side of the bed, eyes closed and tears running down his cheeks, and wish so hard...

    The next day the boy did not open his eyes...



    It was said that boy's soul faded with that star...



    reach to the stars




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