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    dots Submission Name: I'm a Natural dots
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    Author: Abass
    Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 7/8/9
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsI'm a Natural dots
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    I'm a natural, you see.



    Oh what sweet symphonies you pour to me



    You're honey, I'm the bee



    Your eyes are roses, and thank the gardener for maintaining the rose for me


    Red is what I see, in my arms is where you need to be


    Swim in my arms, get lost at sea


    I'll rescue you, to an island we shall flee



    Pluck a rose from your eyes, give it back to the bee, back to feed you the honey that you gave me


    I am a natural, you see.




    Submitted on 2011-06-27 13:31:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The last two lines are my favorite. The metaphor blends well with the symbolism throughout this piece. Nice job!
    | Posted on 2011-07-06 00:00:00 | by peepeye | [ Reply to This ]


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