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    dots Submission Name: Praise And Worship dots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Standing above me,
    holding out a key in your hands
    a Door opens
    -----------------

    Gently you caress me,
    on my calloused skin
    The sun is beaming,
    the fire is hot
    I touch a handle,
    a pencil
    a blade
    sandpaper
    guitar strings in the world above and below

    Subtly you whisper
    voices around me scream, noise pollution
    cars, trains, and aero planes

    But I feel you
    underneath the weights
    the reflections
    the hardened hearted vibrations

    I hear you
    through my head
    these walls
    the thickness of my hair falling down past my shoulders

    Today I went on a jog, and yesterday
    and the day before

    The faster I ran
    the slower the world moved
    The longer my stride,
    I watched the day tighten up

    Jesus Christ
    Thank You so much
    Quiet
    moments
    united
    ignite
    soul

    ------------

    Aware
    of the thick bright light
    solid
    shining metal
    key




    Submitted on 2011-06-29 11:50:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Making great passionate love. Nice. Not much else I can say about it. I could picture great and fun things - your words directed them very well :) The only parts that kinda stuck out for me were the jogging part and the last bit "solid shining metal key". A little clarification would be nice. But very nicely written.
    | Posted on 2011-07-01 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Happy day! I really like your pieces that step lively and bring me to think line for line with smiles to share ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-06-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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