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    dots Submission Name: Sanctuarydots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    kicking up their feet
    and swaying

    high altitudes
    make skyscrapers dance in the sky
    like my praises
    like the sun in the sky

    Less than the whispering day
    a haughty morning
    ready to

    is restlessness
    and stirring
    like a great pot of several soups
    and textures

    a great heaping

    the love
    won't be over soon

    tickled and in the backseat of many cars
    ride along

    backwards has become forwards
    and forwards is now upside down
    as the sound
    of familiar things
    is held above your head
    and called out in the name that God gave you

    a tambourine
    makes me boogy
    and softly
    I tap my feet
    and wiggle in my chair
    and whistle in the back of my mind
    this is the
    day that
    I feel so good

    Don't got a broken heart
    or a single ounce of dissapointmen
    there is confidence in this

    Submitted on 2011-06-29 12:35:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dancing buildings, a stuffy start of a day slowly disappearing, feeling the day turning and you can feel it changing and cool things coming, and you think about getting off work - going home to do the boogy, hehe, you're daydreaming about boogying at work I'm guessing and it makes you feel good, and the final bit is nice and kind of ties it together. No matter what you think about how things are going - you can find hope and "confidence" in it and it all makes sense in the end and everything will work out . . . if you believe it will. That's what I got from it :)
    | Posted on 2011-07-01 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Munchies for love? :) I like the slow, broken rhythm of this. The content could be enhanced a bit with more clear visuals...
    | Posted on 2011-06-30 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]

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