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    dots Submission Name: Rapture and Riddledots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 318
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsRapture and Riddledots
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    A sleeping beast
    Or winged messenger from God
    Lays its quicksand of the truth
    And I am spat like a petal from some nameless bloody heart
    A constant question of the proof

    I scratch in complacent deals
    With my fellow’s skin and drone predators
    While living in the fields
    A cauldron drips
    These poppies fix

    A soldiers boot
    Addiction is
    The needle spent is where I live

    But faith can be
    Such a fickle masturbation of sentiment

    Did I nail myself onto the wood
    In scarlet scars through shrinking palms
    Sacrifice my history
    So they could write a misshapen allegory
    So they could rest their scraps
    In painted psalms of papier-mâché
    None of it was me
    I was not born to be
    An asset
    Of their delinquency

    Did I lay myself out in love
    To hang there torn upon the cross
    A plush riddle in comforts upholstery
    The benediction of their ease
    The filthy placebo of their greed

    In the ragged bones I fall to earth
    In the moist illusion of the dust
    With this wretched taste of famine in my throat

    Am I the benediction of their greed
    The filthy placebo of their disease

    A nameless child who scavenges
    For every single breath
    As I lay here in the dirt
    And in the gluttony of the church
    And so for pities sake
    Just one more obloquy of prayer
    In the chronicle of remembrance

    Or sleeping angel
    A winged beast sent from the savage eye of God

    Lays in the quicksand of the truth
    Spat from a stinking petal
    Of some cringing bloody heart
    And I will gather here a while
    The meagre scraps of dust and earth

    A constant question of the proof





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      Wow, nice write. Very interesting. I at times find my self searching for a scraps of proof in my life.

    "In the ragged bones I fall to earth
    In the moist illusion of the dust
    With this wretched taste of famine in my throat"

    I like that.
    | Posted on 2011-07-03 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]
      Happy day Col13x & Happy 4th!

    IT's BEen a great day for EPIC PIECES ~*~

    This piece is revealing and thought provoking ~*~

    Lots of Poetic Smiles 2 Share ;-) ;-) ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-07-02 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. The subject matter is very modern. The presentation might still need some work though. You could brush it up here and there...
    | Posted on 2011-07-01 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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