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    dots Submission Name: The Kissing Treedots
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    Author: peepeye
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 5/0/2
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Cheesy Joke/Comedy
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    dotsThe Kissing Treedots
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    Here we are alone,
    Beneath the kissing tree;
    I'm gonna kiss you,
    You're gonna kiss me!

    I've been waiting for this day,
    To kiss you all so much;
    Together we close our eyes,
    While our lips gently touch!

    You start to shake and shiver,
    Like a maniac having a fit;
    By now it turns to screaming,
    Not sure if you'll ever quit!

    I know my kiss is fatal,
    Equal to a heart attack;
    Right in the midst of that searing kiss,
    A caterpillar crawled down your back!






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