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    dots Submission Name: Upgrade your emotions!dots
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    Author: Paradox
    ASL Info:    33/m/Earthbound
    Elite Ratio:    4.58 - 1055/434/90
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I've worked for Hewlett Packard some time ago. And for almost two years I was constantly online. I was wired to the machine and spent every wake second inputting data. Even on the subway I was online on my psp and mobile phone. It was a strange and awkward way of spending life for me...


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    dotsUpgrade your emotions!dots
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    Some girl just wrote: I love you, on my facebook wall
    And I began to wonder: how much is a yahoo smiley worth?
    How much force does the love sign I posted in return carry?
    Or have we stumbled upon something totally different here?
    A sort of brushed aluminum anesthesia of all feelings

    Can true love really bloom automatically on an instant?
    Or will it suffocate smothered in a complex cocoon of wires?
    I guess there is no place for old: taking it slowly, nowadays
    As sensations burn at once triggered by quick light signals
    We have entered the future with our wrists fused to keys

    True blood cells seem to rush through laser signals
    Yet the heart remains at a constant bpm reassured by light
    It is this frozen light entering our eyes that connects us all
    So how can true feelings and emotions take natural course?
    How can we see ourselves from behind blue walls?




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      I was delighted to read a poem that captured the impersonal reality. I love use of analogy in this poem. If we are not careful....our humanity on every level will be evaluated off the strength of what we broadcast online.
    | Posted on 2011-09-16 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]
      How true! I have had to deal with withdrawal symptoms every time I had to be offline for an extended period of time. It is just a totally different (parallel +/-) existence.
    | Posted on 2011-07-03 00:00:00 | by arkayye | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks for the positive feedback thus far! These questions are really important to me as it applies to most of our online lives. Even to this site and the way we try to express ourselves. I'm in a search of new ways to communicate. I think I've discovered a path in a kind of minimalistic poetry that should be perfect for this short attention span deficit age. :) I will post these short new poems as I move along...
    | Posted on 2011-07-03 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Happy day Paradox!

    I really connected with this piece and I spend a lot of time on and off the computer for work and positive energy spreading but I love to turn these off and meditate upon what is around and what is withIN.

    Balance ~*~

    Thanks for the recommendation and reciprocation with smiles to share :-)
    | Posted on 2011-07-02 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Good questions , yet love can take many forms, some love their cat or dog, another loved their new sports car, or yacht, or the new garden, with its many lovely sights and smells.
    One can love a friend, their family or even their enemy, yet none can compare to the love of a dear spouse, who has shared the glory and pain of child birth, and shared the loss of a family member.
    Yes love can take many forms but do not be deceived as to think one kind is another.
    | Posted on 2011-07-02 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      Not having had this experience (I'm long-time married and wouldn't have a clue what to do if I wasn't), I can't really speak to this. I DO like the style and you pose very interesting questions.
    | Posted on 2011-07-02 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      I have five children about your age. They are all wired in too. When I was your age, computers were still huge things with big tapes that no one owed except big business and the government. We met people mostly by our activities, parties and such. This wired world is so impersonal. However, one of my daughters is living in Arizona with a guy from Texas she met playing World of War Craft on the internet. Whatever works. You clearly show this phenomenon of today with humor.
    | Posted on 2011-07-02 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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