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BrEatHE


Author: Epiphany
ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342 /2139 /390
Words: 18
Class/Type: Prose /Love
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A great Yoga class today @ River City Wellness in Cameron Park, CA ~*~

2 ALL Love, Peace, Joy, Abundance, Beauty & Prosperous Healthy Smiles to Share ;-) ;-) ;-)


BrEatHE



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Submitted on 2011-07-02 15:04:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the way you break down words then tie the pieces together to form new meaning. I have never done yoga (just never had the time or made the time) put have thought about doing it as I am very stiff and need the stretching. The yoga mental discipline also seems appealing. Thus, I can't understand this poem from that perspective. But is seems you are weaving yoga physical element with the mental, coming together at the end with the message of being one or we are all one. You do wonderful work. I always admire inventiveness in using words.
| Posted on 2011-08-21 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
  I like what you did with this. Even though I hate math. Its witty and yet simple.
| Posted on 2011-07-03 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]


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