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    dots Submission Name: "A Song Of Tears"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
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    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dots"A Song Of Tears"dots
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    A solitary teardrop
    fell from her lovely chin
    and its melancholy journey
    was about to just begin.

    Though one would scarcely notice
    the wetness on her skin
    it would soon be followed by others
    as if they were brethren.

    Shattered hopes and dreams
    had started them to fall
    a lie and broken trust
    was the cause behind it all.

    Her tears fell to the river
    which coursed into the sea
    an ocean filled with tears
    from untold misery.

    Her sobbing could be heard
    far and wide throughout the land
    a song of tears that were cruelly made
    by the thoughtlessness of man.




    Submitted on 2011-07-02 22:36:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "A solitary teardrop
    fell from her lovely chin
    and its melancholy journey
    was about to just begin."

    I absolutely love this!

    You are like silk with your words, nothing more to say.


    | Posted on 2012-04-10 00:00:00 | by PrettyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      This is lovely, how you beautifull woven these words into a tearful song :) Reminds me of a song "Cry Me a River"

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    A solitary teardrop
    fell from her lovely chin
    and its melancholy journey
    was about to just begin.

    an ocean filled with tears
    from untold misery.

    a song of tears that were cruelly made
    by the thoughtlessness of man.

    And it is very sad how people can be so cruel to the point that their create teardrops of pain that falls from their vicitim's saddened eyes.

    Nicely penned my friend!

    Althea~



    | Posted on 2011-08-13 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      To think all the salt in the seas came from tears would be so depressing. Tears can be a cleansing agent for a soul in pain. Very beautiful RON.
    | Posted on 2011-08-03 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
       Beautiful poem, so sweet, thank you for sharing !
    Ron, could you please tell me how to sign out of Elite web site?
    I'm not a writer and I don't blame anyone for not commenting on my posts.
    I'm going to leave the writting up to Ed, he's the writer in the family and he's good at it.
    I've enjoyed your poems and stories and I will continue reading them on Ed's new site.
    Renee : }

    | Posted on 2011-07-07 00:00:00 | by reneeskorner | [ Reply to This ]
      Really good, makes me think of olden times, and obviously her tears were started by a man..what else is there to make a girl cry ;)
    | Posted on 2011-07-07 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! I love the old school rhythm. It really goes well with the picture. :) I like these rhymes most:

    Her tears fell to the river
    which coursed into the sea
    an ocean filled with tears
    from untold misery.

    Good writing Sir!

    I just started posting again. Any feedback on my work would be highly appreciated...
    | Posted on 2011-07-03 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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