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    dots Submission Name: Creeperdots
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    Author: snacky fish
    ASL Info:    31/male/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 377/472/111
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 403
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    Bytes: 475



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    Manic and enigmatic
    Creeper of the deeps
    Calling through static
    Looking for your eyes

    Soothing in silence
    Beckoning your gaze
    Spell weaving gentle violence
    Looking for a slave

    A phantoms feast of fear
    In a vermilion vertigo
    Bidding you near
    Looking for your eyes

    Exotical incubus
    In a romantic rage
    Searching for his succubus
    Looking for a slave




    Submitted on 2011-07-03 20:06:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sweet, some comprehensive words there that eased through in the stanzas. i skimmed it and saw a bunch of detailed, point driven words and didnt think you could make it work, i only6 say that cause most people that try to over complicate the vocabulary in their work fail, im kinda guilty of that, but thats why i step back and look at what i am writting, that being said, everyone has their own style and yours is obviously is working. keep it up i looking forward to reading more of your stuff.
    | Posted on 2011-07-04 00:00:00 | by lone_one | [ Reply to This ]


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