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    dots Submission Name: Desert rosedots

    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 139/254/170
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDesert rosedots

    Let me, the weary nomad,
    lend ear to the desert rose -
    and catch its breathless whispers
    to the silently burning universe

    of lips in sudden motion,
    ablaze, athirst, askew -
    oh but to taste the blossoms,
    imbued with moonlit dew! -

    nought else but Sufi's tears
    upon the weathered sand -

    of how the hovering firebirds
    are landing on my hand.

    Submitted on 2011-07-04 12:55:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a wonderful poem to be reciting aloud. The words are melodic and heavenly. It's relaxing to hear your choice of words.

    I loved also the concept; the little details such as the hovering bird landing on your hand, a universe silently burning. It's not overdone. It has that perfect balance.

    I found this to be a wonderful read.

    Thanks for sharing.

    | Posted on 2011-07-06 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. It takes us to another part of our world and reminds us the desert may just be the best place to experience God. How long dare we wander and where is the line between dying to self and simply dying?
    | Posted on 2011-07-05 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      the universe is burning up and i along with it...the firebirds landing in my hand...

    i like the imagery and the abstract nature of your writes...i visited others of yours...and glad i found your page.

    the second stanza here is to die for...what wonderful alliteration...rolls off the tongue..

    nicely done.

    | Posted on 2011-07-04 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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