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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    In complete exile from what you said is now my family
    I hear the laughter from outside
    I can see the smiles on all your faces
    Yet I am here...
    Holding back the tears
    Holding in my screams
    I am beyond alone within this world
    Falling deeper within this hole … this black endless hole

    As a child I knew nothing of a family
    Simply the fact I wanted to be a part of one
    Now as an adult the emptiness only remains

    You tell me I am now a part of your family
    However I kept behind a curtain no one is to look behind
    I am left on the side-lines to look on …

    Raging with anger I am!
    Seeing RED I am!

    Why lie to me?
    Why have you put false facts into my mind?
    You have gotten me to fall head over heels for you..
    A man
    Whose heart has no more room for me?

    You tell me you love you me
    Expressing to me I am important to you
    However I have yet to see actions that agree with these words you speak!




    Submitted on 2011-07-04 13:08:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "holding back the tears
    holding in my tears"

    where the lines that stood out to me the most. I think alot of people share these feelings. So I'm sure that many people will love what you wrote.

    not having the feeling of being part of a family growing up is dark heavy feelling that I really don't think people just quickly get over. I think its somthing that effects most people.

    I hope that soon you find your family. :( thank you for posting this. It tears at my heart strings because the feelings written here are so familuar to me.
    | Posted on 2011-07-04 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]
      In matters of love some times long suffering by one is required to see the troubles through.

    However, reciprocation inevitably must be provided to see a healthy love.

    Life is short and hard enough, do not waste time hurting when it will not heal or strengthen you.

    I am going through a divorce. It is hard.
    | Posted on 2011-07-04 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]
      i could relate with you almost completely with this. reason i say almost is simply a sexist matter. not that i mean anything by it. i think a majority of people feel this way. so much loneliness inside and a cloud of untrust on the outside that lingers above your head.
    truly, i wish you the best, and even more i wish you a different road than that which i follow.
    best of luck to you
    -aaron
    | Posted on 2011-07-04 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]


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