This is full of irony and paradoxes. Very fluent, a good wording and an interesting idea. The only line that doesn't seem to quite fit the rest is the last one...I think something like 'And over the battlefields, the school yard alarm' would sound better but well, it's your poem.
The following is the rhyme scheme used in this poem. Authour has rearranged some stanza's possibly for aesthetic effect, but generally it alternates between a AABB, and ABCB rhyme scheme, with exception to the last which does not alternate back. Very interesting piece and choice of style.
A A B B
C D D (although this could have been two lines and then it would be C,D,E,D which truthfully is what it is in earnest)
E E F F
G G (although like the C,D line this is truthfully a 4 line stanza G,H,I,H you can see how it fits with the C,D,E,D second stanze.)
'Twisted minds of the overgrown' This here is the line to be quite honest. I read alot into it - you could write a whole poem just on that. Only other thing is that you misspelled reigns - should be rains b/c the one you used is about kingship and such... shard
Sounds like it could be lyrics. I like it. It's two things at once, in the beginning I thought it was going to be a statement about the war giong on, then it turns out to be a sweet little creepy poem about school kids playing war. Nice.