die safely, lolol. anyway i like this a lot, im a very visual person so when i read (not only do i have to read some things a couple times) and comprehending poetry, i visualize a story. id ramble off on what i visualized (maybe in a PM if u want to hear it lol) but this is your comment on your piece, but i dig the black magic feel and magic vocab, has a dark, personal sacrificial feel, with good flow, sometimes the work with short lines are the hardest to express in, well i liked it a lot.
well wrote man....
PS- thank you for your comment on my piece it was GOOD advice, kinda hard to find around here. look forward to reading more