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Submission Name: 10,000 drops of blood dots

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Author:	snacky fish
ASL Info:	31/male/FL
Elite Ratio:	3.76 - 377/472/111
Words:	164

Class/Type:	Poetry/Dark
Total Views:	618
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1135

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If magic = crazy = beautiful, then I would be Gerard Butler as Leonidas. Take care and die safely.

10,000 drops of blood dots

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The more pain I feel
The more beautiful I become
Like forbidden magic
My skin the seal undone

A slow dying
Long suffering sage
The spell muttered
From blood penned page

In a tongue unheard
Forgotten by times tale
An ancient sooth
That removes the veil

10,000 drops of blood
From one soul lost
Remain in harvest
Endure the covenants's cost

Hold fast your banes
Let them not break
The beauty you reap
Is the pain you take

The purer the sacrifice
Of said willing soul
Yields the potency
Of incantations's goal

If weaving use a heart
From another young yet old
Lest you die in the threads
With your spirit forever sold

To end the curse lashed
Wait for the charm
Then hasten to strike her
With out doing her harm

The spell is not over until
Your heart learns to succumb
The more pain I feel
The more beautiful I become

Submitted on 2011-07-05 00:01:42 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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die safely, lolol. anyway i like this a lot, im a very visual person so when i read (not only do i have to read some things a couple times) and comprehending poetry, i visualize a story. id ramble off on what i visualized (maybe in a PM if u want to hear it lol) but this is your comment on your piece, but i dig the black magic feel and magic vocab, has a dark, personal sacrificial feel, with good flow, sometimes the work with short lines are the hardest to express in, well i liked it a lot.
well wrote man....

PS- thank you for your comment on my piece it was GOOD advice, kinda hard to find around here. look forward to reading more
| Posted on 2011-07-10 00:00:00 | by lone_one | [ Reply to This ]
Wow. This reminds me of Jesus. I really like the intensity of the piece. I am never sure what to say when I really like something.

I think it works well, has great subject and was over all good to read.
| Posted on 2011-07-06 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.