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    dots Submission Name: 10,000 drops of blooddots
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    Author: snacky fish
    ASL Info:    31/male/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 377/472/111
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 510
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1135



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       If magic = crazy = beautiful, then I would be Gerard Butler as Leonidas. Take care and die safely.


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    The more pain I feel
    The more beautiful I become
    Like forbidden magic
    My skin the seal undone

    A slow dying
    Long suffering sage
    The spell muttered
    From blood penned page

    In a tongue unheard
    Forgotten by times tale
    An ancient sooth
    That removes the veil

    10,000 drops of blood
    From one soul lost
    Remain in harvest
    Endure the covenants's cost

    Hold fast your banes
    Let them not break
    The beauty you reap
    Is the pain you take

    The purer the sacrifice
    Of said willing soul
    Yields the potency
    Of incantations's goal

    If weaving use a heart
    From another young yet old
    Lest you die in the threads
    With your spirit forever sold

    To end the curse lashed
    Wait for the charm
    Then hasten to strike her
    With out doing her harm

    The spell is not over until
    Your heart learns to succumb
    The more pain I feel
    The more beautiful I become




    Submitted on 2011-07-05 00:01:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      die safely, lolol. anyway i like this a lot, im a very visual person so when i read (not only do i have to read some things a couple times) and comprehending poetry, i visualize a story. id ramble off on what i visualized (maybe in a PM if u want to hear it lol) but this is your comment on your piece, but i dig the black magic feel and magic vocab, has a dark, personal sacrificial feel, with good flow, sometimes the work with short lines are the hardest to express in, well i liked it a lot.
    well wrote man....

    PS- thank you for your comment on my piece it was GOOD advice, kinda hard to find around here. look forward to reading more
    | Posted on 2011-07-10 00:00:00 | by lone_one | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. This reminds me of Jesus. I really like the intensity of the piece. I am never sure what to say when I really like something.

    I think it works well, has great subject and was over all good to read.
    | Posted on 2011-07-06 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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