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    dots Submission Name: This Ugly And Yet So Beautiful Worlddots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 75/182/208
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 653
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    Bytes: 700



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    dotsThis Ugly And Yet So Beautiful Worlddots
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    Being; becoming
    The duality of what it truly means to exist.

    One hand; the other
    The great absolute set in motion
    A push to the end with an unmoved mover searching for sense.
    The great catharsis that we all seek.
    A love of the beauty in beautiful; a hope to understand why to be
    and in the shadow of individuality we've always had to relearn what it takes to make the soul so perfect.

    You can feel it through closed eyes; the unreal of the mind.
    Imagined thoughts torn askew
    teetering on perfection and truth
    what we know and see; reality comes back to enchant the philosopher.
    The form of seed




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      I do like this, I think you have a lot of soul and that comes out in your writing. I really look forward to more of your work. I am seeing glimpses and hints and artistry a lot of this hits the high note.

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-08-11 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      some nice lines here and interesting journey into the mind...

    the end of the second stanza is a bit wordy and awkward...and opposes the rest of the poem which has a consistent flow to it...

    maybe work on that part some...smooth it out...

    engaging write, kind of different....

    philosophy in poetic form.

    really like the way the last line captures the overall meaning so well...
    "the form of seed"

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-05 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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