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    dots Submission Name: Tread Softlydots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsTread Softlydots
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    I am not a liar
    I do not like to fib
    But my smile betrays me
    As plastic as it is

    I see all
    I know my place
    But I can't deny
    And I can't erase

    One foot in
    I spectate much
    But can't embrace
    Another's touch

    The sand drains
    From the hour glass
    Sometimes time
    Escapes so fast

    Attempt to juggle
    I can't hold on
    Fruits of life
    All seem gone

    But these memories
    They're all mine
    And as I search
    They're all I find

    Memories change you
    The good and the bad
    Some follow regret
    And what you once had

    Some are the shadows
    In your darkest dreams
    Others we long for
    More than not it seems

    The past often torments
    Fills you with pain
    But even roses
    Can leave a stain




    Submitted on 2011-07-05 07:31:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      even roses can leave a stain.....how true that is.

    our past relationships leave a stain no matter how much we try to move on...

    well said....like the near rhyme in the first stanza....

    check out my "roses aren't always red" poem--you might find similar theme...

    and we do often long for shadows once we have been there...and felt the pain of the sun...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-05 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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