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    dots Submission Name: Dark star, my shooting stardots
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    Author: TiaanK
    ASL Info:    37/M/Dancing in the dark
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 22/27/28
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsDark star, my shooting stardots
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    Lost in these trenches
    I dug around my heart
    digging in,
    digging deep
    waiting for words
    to turn truth,
    or into a lie
    all along

    Since when
    does ripping old bandages
    open new wounds?
    just a few,
    seconds of doubt,
    a lifetime without
    and then,
    frame by frame
    what lies in between

    Dark star, my shooting star
    I wish to make a wish
    wishful thinking
    wants to belong to someone
    or something
    wants to be left alone
    supernova
    or dead ship sinking?
    soul survivor
    soul on fire
    Dark star, my shooting star
    we've come so far
    let us start this all over


    - TK 2011




    Submitted on 2011-07-05 13:20:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi TiaanK. Also a deep conversation with the heart and life surround around you in general. Look at the Light side of that Star. Waiting to be explored and the lost to be found again.
    Well composed.
    Regards Joachim
    | Posted on 2011-07-15 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]


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