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Submission Name: Dark star, my shooting star dots

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Author:	TiaanK
ASL Info:	37/M/Dancing in the dark
Elite Ratio:	4 - 22/27/28
Words:	109

Class/Type:	Poetry/
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Dark star, my shooting star dots

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Lost in these trenches
I dug around my heart
digging in,
digging deep
waiting for words
to turn truth,
or into a lie
all along

Since when
does ripping old bandages
open new wounds?
just a few,
seconds of doubt,
a lifetime without
and then,
frame by frame
what lies in between

Dark star, my shooting star
I wish to make a wish
wishful thinking
wants to belong to someone
or something
wants to be left alone
supernova
or dead ship sinking?
soul survivor
soul on fire
Dark star, my shooting star
we've come so far
let us start this all over

- TK 2011

Submitted on 2011-07-05 13:20:04 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Hi TiaanK. Also a deep conversation with the heart and life surround around you in general. Look at the Light side of that Star. Waiting to be explored and the lost to be found again.
Well composed.
Regards Joachim
| Posted on 2011-07-15 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]

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