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    dots Submission Name: Let Me Pretenddots
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    Author: Texan_Poet
    ASL Info:    20/F/daydreaming
    Elite Ratio:    5.7 - 127/123/48
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
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    dotsLet Me Pretenddots
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    "Hush, hush."
    No words,
    No whispers,

    Only skin
    And skin.
    Soft moans,
    and pleasure.

    My skill,
    My talent.
    Career,
    And training;

    Shhhh, shhhhh.
    Let me pretend.

    Kneading,
    Friction,
    Efflurage,
    Petrisage,

    Rolling,
    Touching,
    Muscular dysfunction,
    Bodily corruption,

    Massage Therapist;
    Hush, hush

    Only skin,
    And skin.
    Soft moans,
    And pleasure.

    Just for a while....
    He doesnt know,
    Doesnt have to.
    But... I need this.

    The pleasure
    Returned from pain,
    Muscular Dysfunction;
    Correction, relief.

    My touches
    Mean pleasure,
    My soft kisses,
    Arouse you.

    Sensual
    Caressing,
    Fire, and passion,
    soft, and growing.

    Hunger,
    And love,
    And kisses,
    Sweet kisses.

    Shhhh, hush.
    No words,
    No whispers.

    You fall asleep.
    And I roll off the bed.
    Massage Therapist-
    Treating my husband.

    Soft kisses,
    Warm skin.
    Let me hold you close?
    Let me hold my breath;

    "Sweet dreams,
    Sleep tight.
    I love you,
    Goodnight."

    I dont want this moment to end,
    Just...
    Please.

    Let me pretend?




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    ||| Comments |||
      The basic emotions are always expressed with perfection. There is rawness to this piece that makes it interesting to read. I felt a few tingles going through me.

    I'm not too sure about the title. It doesn't particularly send me anywhere, so I don't know where I'm going when I start reading. But once, I've read a few stanzas, I get the idea of this relationship that needs to be renewed; a flame that needs to be reignited.

    The words are simple but for this topic, I think they fit perfect.

    Nice read.

    Cheers,
    | Posted on 2011-07-07 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      the early moments in relationships seem the best...when there is such chemistry...electricity, passion...and later we try to find ways to hold onto that passion or renew it....

    this poem is suggestive of that and there is quite a sensuality to these words...because there is honesty, and much visual and touch imagery...

    with almost no auditory imagery...the hush, even of the whispers...let us speak with our hands our skin our movement with each other.

    honest writing...

    like it

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-06 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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