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    dots Submission Name: Heart Shaped Moondots
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    Author: moaxcym
    ASL Info:    23/m/Pakistan
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 155/196/85
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHeart Shaped Moondots
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    Tonight when the moths tried to kiss the moon,
    And the crows dived fervently into the luminous shores,
    I sang so perfectly to my heart's tune:
    Not a verse less, not a beat more.




    Submitted on 2011-07-06 21:19:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      did the moon whisper of loveliness
    in ways that mimicked her elegance
    lean as a leopard stalking the fold
    as her slender fingers spun stars like gold

    Just a few thoughts on yours.




    | Posted on 2015-12-15 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! I really enjoyed this. It's so short and concise. It reminds me of my writing. Moths are a reoccurring motive in my poetry. In fact I have a poem entitled: A siren screaming and a cloud of moths...
    | Posted on 2011-07-07 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Love it, nothing like being true to your heart.
    You should grow this more and make it a longer writ.
    | Posted on 2011-07-07 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]


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