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    dots Submission Name: "Teach me how to count again..."dots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 640
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 657



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    dots"Teach me how to count again..."dots
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    Teach me how to count like in the old days when yellow was gold and we had no ideas grown from growing old..
    Fold me into your slide, the pictures I own I cannot hide.

    Hand me your tarnished buckle, I need to smile again,
    just a mouthful...
    You think we are nothing more than souls wrapped in bone but I tell you now
    we are hearts, calling skin our home.

    Teach me how to count
    Like in the old days.
    We used to be siamese
    And emotions couldn't do as they pleased
    And love was a heat-seeking missile, and I,
    the ember king..




    Submitted on 2011-07-07 08:09:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh wow this is just wonderful, flawless throughout in my opinion, easily one of the VERY best things I have EVER read,

    thanks for sharing.

    Jazmine
    | Posted on 2011-08-09 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      "You think we are nothing more than souls wrapped in bone but I tell "

    And

    "we had no ideas grown from growing old"

    Golden lines. I loved those. I loved it all. The words here are well chosen and the flow was effortless. I found myself smiling as I was reading this. It was pleasant. It was memorable. The images, though not many, because this is a short piece, are still breathtaking and easy to visualize.

    Cheers,
    | Posted on 2011-07-07 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this...nice verbiage....reminds me of "the Outsiders"

    "stay gold" or john mellancamp...singing "hold onto 16 as long as you can"

    i have been thinking a lot lately about this subject...me, my parents in their 90's now...yep we can't go back...we have to enjoy what we have...
    "just a mouthful" was my only roadblock here...the line just feels out of place, like an interruption to an otherwise good flow.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-07 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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