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    dots Submission Name: Perspectivedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 460
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    dotsPerspectivedots
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    the picture has been painted
    red and white sunset over the horizon

    three figures standing parallel
    casting shadows
    and leaving foot prints in the dirt

    Imitating a moment of reality

    The woods in the corner stood so still
    like the wind forgot how to blow or just decided to rest
    thinking it would be alright
    if there was no breeze in this summer heat

    But the figures stood with the sun beating down,
    their composure chilling
    the atmosphere

    A clear sky, not a single cloud to empty out
    but scattered rain drops fell like gestures left behind

    There is no notice of time, save the shadows
    The landscape sits still
    senslessly defying the laws that govern this place and time

    It is spoken
    with lines that dance across the picture
    that the only things that remain
    are the differences
    in distance
    importance
    value
    scale






    Submitted on 2011-07-07 11:55:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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