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    dots Submission Name: Wishdots
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    Author: snacky fish
    ASL Info:    31/male/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 377/472/111
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Some people are big stupid jerk heads, if I had it my way I would kill them all until they where just like me. Take care and die safely.


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    Wish into one hand,
    And murder with the other
    Then tell me which one,
    Grows tired first?

    Life is quite simple
    It is the heart that is not
    If one cannot see their chains
    Then with in them one will rot

    Love with your words,
    And kill with your smile
    Then tell me what's fake,
    Was it all worth while?

    As children we where taught
    A rule made of gold
    We soon forgot
    As compassion grew old

    Wish into one hand,
    And murder with the other
    Now taste them both
    Prey tell, death or hope?




    Submitted on 2011-07-10 21:28:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this...children are not prejudiced..they are honest as all get out...and then they watch the adults, they take after them and grow away from innocence...what they see is what they eventually do...

    so sad....and after that first love which we jump into with reckless abandon...we get hurt and it has that lasting effect..we become cautious.

    as allison said in Breakfast Club...\"it is inevitable, when you grow old, your heart dies\"
    | Posted on 2011-07-10 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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