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    dots Submission Name: would you be?dots

    Author: w0ords
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 30/20/19
    Words: 278
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotswould you be?dots

    Would you be my girlfriend?
    Ill begin and you got the end
    Wouldnt care on what you wear
    As long as you dare to bare
    Your heart, that is

    Before you answer
    Let me show it in a playful manner
    To convince a certain coincidence
    You might be the one
    And Im not yet done
    Take it off and show me
    Your clothes? No no no no
    If you want to know
    Put it on a show
    Your mind, that is

    Taking a risk to frisk here
    Wont diss to get a kiss
    Hope I wont miss with this
    Lets continue with the show
    Watching it on the front seat
    Is where I sit
    Enough to hear you here my dear
    Your words, that is

    You walked, each step you toke
    To blaze wait to gaze
    You in so much depts
    Not a closer step, perfect
    To discover a level of admiration
    On a sweet duration and not to mention
    The short sensation of slow paced tension
    On this dimension and enough of my wicked
    After the show, Ill be outside just to see
    Whats inside
    Your soul, that is

    Glowing, flowing beauty
    Captures me in the hour of three
    Now will you be for me?
    Almost at the last part
    This could be the depart
    Still Ill explore you, every part of you
    From top to bottom, summer till autumn
    Your life, that is

    Should I go on? Or should I stop?
    Drop everything on the floor
    And I still adore you
    Enough of this word bore
    Will wait for your answer
    So please do remember
    Your decision, that is

    Submitted on 2011-07-11 08:25:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this!! I love how when you begin to read it, it sounds like hormonal, lustful love but then the last few lines of each stanza tell the reader that it goes deeper than that. This is the kind of love few attain or even want. Thanks for letting me know that I am not alone or a fool for wanting this kind of love.
    | Posted on 2011-08-10 00:00:00 | by beautywithin3 | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful poem. It talks of a type of love, that most would not understand. My favorite verse is:

    "gazing on your luscious beauty
    captures my till the hour of three
    now, will you be for me?
    achieving the last part, maybe a depart
    i will still explore you, every part of you
    top to bottom, summer till autumn
    your life, that is"

    | Posted on 2011-07-12 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]

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