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    dots Submission Name: And Jesus ...... Wept dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsAnd Jesus ...... Wept dots

    I fell to my knees and wept
    Bound in aged skin
    With the scars designed
    I wept in chains

    And though the tears flowed
    Still I burned again a hundred fold
    As I lay my fist on quiet Earth
    And died within the heartbeat of everyone else

    Every sob tore its mouthful of food from my throat
    Each wretched and bloodied second
    A whining bullet for my soul to fall upon
    And I drown within the pain of someone

    .. This quiet blockade

    Such a taste upon my lips
    Of all the vicious felt this stab into my back
    And to my heart echoed such sorrow
    When at last my eyes were opened

    In such agony have I lived
    Mindless, dumb and clueless
    In such a welter of deceit did I exist
    To be blinded by the promise of comfort

    And such is a the price I paid
    When my soul beat vengeance on this quiet blockade
    And by the divisions of wealth
    It was I, who had become a slave

    I cannot count the grains of rice
    Nor the bodies strung out in a corpses eye
    And I can only bleed within my heart
    To witness such insanity

    I do not stand there among them
    The butchered bloody collateral damage of hatred
    Yet die each moment with them
    My family of children, my brothers and my sisters

    Submitted on 2011-07-11 09:31:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "what if God was one of us"

    he would weep, no doubt, at the mess we have made of ourselves...

    this poem is strong...needs some editing but really powerful words and meaning...

    a good reflection of the state of life these days...and how could a God not look upon all this without sorrow.

    | Posted on 2011-07-11 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      i lied this and i often struggle with darker work i get lost in it but this kept my attention wich is hard to do . i really did like it . it felt a little held back or overly edited ... like maybe you went through a few times could be wrong .. id love to read more of your work and ill check it out soon all togeather good work !
    | Posted on 2011-07-11 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]

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