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    dots Submission Name: I walk alonedots
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    Author: TiaanK
    ASL Info:    32/M/Dancing in the dark
    Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 22/27/27
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 516
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    dotsI walk alonedots
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    I walk alone
    Many a scar never shown
    I walk alone
    Life carved a heart out of stone

    I walk alone
    Only lost control can leave me thrown
    I walk alone
    Leaving behind the chances that I've blown

    I walk alone
    The prince of a lonesome throne
    I walk alone
    The nomad searching for a home

    I walk alone
    Lips of poison left me prone
    I walk alone
    Cleopatra burned down my Rome

    I walk alone
    Rage masked by a friendly tone
    I walk alone
    Torn seams neatly sown

    I walk alone
    Pain resonates through every bone
    I walk alone
    Never moan, never groan

    I walk alone
    This dusty dark road on my own
    I walk alone
    My destination still unknown
    So I walk alone

    - TK 2010




    Submitted on 2011-07-11 15:04:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Thank you kindly,

    This is somehow also my favourite, and that part you mentioned specifically as well. I was battling to find something suitable to the 'Lips of poison' part and had a light-bulb moment with the Cleopatra part. I'm sure you know the feeling; looking at it afterwards thinking: Yeah..that's pretty damn cool even, if I must say so myself...lol
    | Posted on 2011-07-15 00:00:00 | by TiaanK | [ Reply to This ]
      I've read four of your poems now, and this one is definetly my favorite.
    It has a really tight flow and clever rhyming.
    Favorite part:

    "I walk alone
    Lips of poison left me prone
    I walk alone
    Cleopatra burned down my Rome"

    Awesome!
    | Posted on 2011-07-15 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]


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