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    dots Submission Name: young familydots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 736
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    Bytes: 1219



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       just random writing


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    dotsyoung familydots
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    It was just like yesterday
    i had a lovely family
    now we had are ups and downs
    now I'm sitting here, all alone looking down
    asking myself what the fuck did i do mess it up
    eh I'm a clown
    i know exactly what I did
    6 girls, broken promises, lies on top of lies
    creating a mount Everest of demise
    lets jump and see who lives and dies
    my own insecurities could eat me alive

    I don't what I'm trying to say cause i fucked up
    I have a fucked up personality
    with the lost control of rationality
    Hate me love me don't know me
    my breath and words worthless
    find me 6ft under the surface.

    stuck in a crossroad
    don't know what way to go
    look into my beautiful daughter eyes
    knowing i can't be selfish helpless or worthless
    i got to be a different man
    not like my dad, a revolving door in and out
    acting like i don't give fuck anymore
    going through some struggles
    i don't know what to feel
    im numb to the world
    that why im sitting here
    reflecting on the past




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