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Falling into you

Author: lynn7
ASL Info:    43/ St. Augustine, FL
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Words: 63
Class/Type: Rant /Misc
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Falling into you

I'm broken, boys
as much as I try
I keep fading into now
forgive me if I fall to you
my heart is chasing a dream
that holds me captive
that keeps me seeking lost treasure
Is it all over for me
Or have I just begun
I'm still here
I'm still alive
wide open
and ready
try again

Submitted on 2011-07-12 01:16:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  sandman its whatever doesn't kill you only makes you stranger.....okay that being said I liked this poem i always describe myself as broken so i relate to you on that level but trying again seems so hard, so saying that you are ready to try again is admirable!
| Posted on 2011-08-01 00:00:00 | by gothicgirl | [ Reply to This ]
  hey and hi thanx for the past comments i am happy you enjoy some of my thoughts

i alwaz looked at love or any of the downfalls in life if it doesnt kill me it will only make me stronger your words are almost the same
hope all is good
thanx sandman
| Posted on 2011-07-12 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
  too many times getting our heart broken make each new time harder to open it back up...

a piece that flows from the gut.

| Posted on 2011-07-12 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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