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    dots Submission Name: Soppily explaineddots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSoppily explaineddots
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    The wind
    is companion
    to the sail
    as distance
    is to gulls' wail.

    The water
    is to earth
    as a mother
    nurtured,
    giving birth.

    The sand
    is to feet
    like the secret times
    they meet,
    sacred and divine..

    Time infinitely
    spans
    the open blue,
    let's twirl
    in the sun's hue
    as we fill the spaces
    between me and you...

    -Svw




    Submitted on 2011-07-12 08:17:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      should be "gull's wail" or "gulls' wail" if you want to keep it plural...

    minor

    this poem has a good appearance in line length..nice rhyme/slant rhyme scheme

    and creates the feeling of love as symmetrical...everything matching perfectly...

    nice wording...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-12 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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