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    dots Submission Name: Catch Medots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsCatch Medots
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    run toward no further goals than the ends of the earth
    that won't disappear
    horizons behind my eyes sway back and forth
    thirty seconds into a memory
    that
    won't fade
    to black before dawn

    A slow dance into the seasons
    changing
    cool air hits my lungs before
    I can imagine
    drowining
    living
    underwater where the whole life inside of me just breathes a new way

    thoughts circle
    transform into
    clay pots and
    statues that
    pose
    to elevate the sensual
    sensation
    picking up on
    new waves
    traveling soldiers on their own way
    to destinations that won't bog them down

    survivors duck their heads in the sand
    and make suicidal jumps that haven't killed them
    tasting the fear behind their sorrow and carrying on
    to
    the next page





    Submitted on 2011-07-12 16:11:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      suicides that don't work...we move on...life moves on...we write about the attempts...

    like Lady Lazarus by syliva plath..

    this is how it felt...

    some spellings and such...but a potent write nonetheless...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-12 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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