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    dots Submission Name: Love Hurtsdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Romance
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       We once were at the top of our game. But now we are losing horribly and I am at the end of my rope.


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    I'm desperately searching for you,
    The man I met over a year ago
    The person I fell in love with
    Someone who was so in-tune with my needs
    There was no reason to even express what they were
    The man who took time to think of me
    Even if only be for a second at the check outline, to grab me my favorite candy bar

    Why am no longer worthy of your time?

    I am hurting..
    You are hurting me...

    I am no longer the women I once was to you
    For whatever reason I am no longer as important
    No longer worth your time or energy
    Showing me I am worth just as much as your empty promises
    Telling me things you know I am in desperate need to hear
    Just too temporarily keep me quiet
    Why you have not just gotten rid of me I cannot say
    I am a stranger in my own home
    A loner in the bed we sleep in
    A foreigner to what I thought we have between us

    I am nothing of importance to you, as I once was!
    Then again I have to ask myself, was I ever at all important to you
    Or shall I just assume you are like most men?




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      I second what ron said and can feel your pain jumping from each of the words written here... I again can relate to such feeligns of loss and i am truly sorry you needed to feel such pain to write such a great piece..never settle for second best because there is someone who will treat you as you deserve to be treated..and loved as you truly deserve to be loved.
    | Posted on 2012-01-27 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      Our lives are enriched by our relationships; even the bad ones and the ones that don't turn out. We grow stronger, wiser, even develop more empathy for our fellow man....from failed and painful relationships.

    But all of that fine philosophy does nothing to soothe the ache and pain...It's your pain, and even the most caring friend can't feel it...

    You are a special person, with a special purpose in life...and you will grow into it, and into a land of sunshine and pretty flowers....
    and painful memories from the past will guide you to cherished moments and bright sunsets in the future....
    | Posted on 2011-07-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Someone once told me that if you are in a relationship with someone who is causing you pain, mental or physical, or just plain old sadness, you havta wonder why you are in that relationship at all.
    Life is to short. Relationships are suppossed to have hard times, not just be hard. Which is this? Only you can decide.
    | Posted on 2011-07-13 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]
      well we aren't all this way...but i guess it could seem like that...

    been in this kind of relationship enough to feel this poem...

    that "being on the same wavelength feeling"

    not having to express in words because actions and reactions are automatic and loving...and then somewhere along the line..that feeling gets displaced with the "who are you?" and "why am i here?" sort of thing...

    it does suck to be caught up in that...you want to see if you can get it back, but at the same time the effort feels fruitless and impossible...

    you become "strangers in the night"

    like in the song by the everly brothers later done by nazareth..."love burns you when it's hot" but it seems it burns more when it cools off....

    really gutsy poem full of feeling...a confessional style that there needs to be more of these days...real honesty flows in the words.

    and i have felt this...and know it.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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