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    dots Submission Name: The Wise One Speaksdots
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    Author: charmedidentity
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.9 - 864/897/406
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       The wise one speaks of not so wise words.


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    Whatever my thoughts were
    before I left the elevator door
    have been punched from my mind
    by a razor sharp squealing voice.

    “Shut your lips!
    The wise one speaks
    Of her useless knowledge
    Of tasks we know, oh too well.
    Shut your ears!
    The wise one speaks
    Piercing your eardrums
    With her downright ignorance.”

    Whatever words I said
    To cheer myself for the day
    Have been squashed away
    Like an insect of no purpose.

    “Shut your eyes!
    The wise one speaks
    With her blob-like features;
    Her feet dangling off her seat.
    Shut your mind!
    The wise one speaks
    As she fails to stop her squeaks
    She fails to see no one is listening.”

    Whatever resentment I had
    Metamorphosed into a tragedy
    Of a sad life by a so-called wise one
    Who will never know the truth.




    Submitted on 2011-07-13 15:00:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      who is the wise one?

    our other self who knows better? we have one personality who actually does things and the other personality with that voice that asks "Why did you do that?"

    it is the wise side of us vs. the heart side of us...and which side do we listen to? i don't know..but there is something about following the heart, the gut, the instinct that makes us really feel life...the wise part of us may be smart...but mmm..maybe we miss a lot that way....

    and the truth of life is what is lived...not what is taught with words, what is saved for later, what is avoided...

    this poem really speaks of this to me..

    to places to check...third line of first and third stanzas..it should be "have" not "has" in both spots...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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