[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: The Wise One Speaksdots

    Author: charmedidentity
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.9 - 864/897/406
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 644
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 970

       The wise one speaks of not so wise words.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Wise One Speaksdots

    Whatever my thoughts were
    before I left the elevator door
    have been punched from my mind
    by a razor sharp squealing voice.

    “Shut your lips!
    The wise one speaks
    Of her useless knowledge
    Of tasks we know, oh too well.
    Shut your ears!
    The wise one speaks
    Piercing your eardrums
    With her downright ignorance.”

    Whatever words I said
    To cheer myself for the day
    Have been squashed away
    Like an insect of no purpose.

    “Shut your eyes!
    The wise one speaks
    With her blob-like features;
    Her feet dangling off her seat.
    Shut your mind!
    The wise one speaks
    As she fails to stop her squeaks
    She fails to see no one is listening.”

    Whatever resentment I had
    Metamorphosed into a tragedy
    Of a sad life by a so-called wise one
    Who will never know the truth.

    Submitted on 2011-07-13 15:00:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      who is the wise one?

    our other self who knows better? we have one personality who actually does things and the other personality with that voice that asks "Why did you do that?"

    it is the wise side of us vs. the heart side of us...and which side do we listen to? i don't know..but there is something about following the heart, the gut, the instinct that makes us really feel life...the wise part of us may be smart...but mmm..maybe we miss a lot that way....

    and the truth of life is what is lived...not what is taught with words, what is saved for later, what is avoided...

    this poem really speaks of this to me..

    to places to check...third line of first and third stanzas..it should be "have" not "has" in both spots...

    | Posted on 2011-07-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    written by Daniel Barlow
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Linger written by saartha
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    AI written by poetotoe
    Summer written by layDsayD
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Every..... written by jackz
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    True Death written by layDsayD
    Happy Saint Patrick's Day written by poetotoe
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]