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    dots Submission Name: Ode to Bourbon Finedots
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    Author: Blue Monk
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsOde to Bourbon Finedots
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    Of late we'd like to spend our time
    on hearty Bourbon made so fine
    and never spend another dime
    on wine

    Such western gold Kentucky Straight
    of legend we can meditate
    while father's fathers congregate
    of late

    Pray not to break this special bond
    and glow of which we are so fond
    for stuff which came across the pond
    begone

    Good things happen “just because”
    but special is as special does
    as welcome comes the lightest buzz
    my cuz

    But time prevails o're lucre si
    Sangria better plays than tea
    and might make for a better me
    to be

    It's fire or blood ingested then
    so balance son, remember when
    and why, and how it did begin
    my friend

    And toast to each a mindful sip
    and guard as arms be on your hip
    for loving kindness never slip
    thy lip




    Submitted on 2011-07-13 17:31:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm not sure why a image of the England and the Revolution came in to mind with catsles and Kings and Queens lol Your poetry is making my imagination run wild :)

    Fav lines~

    -Pray not to break this special bond
    and glow of which we are so fond
    for stuff which came across the pond
    begone-

    We all have a special bond which we wouldn't want broken.

    This was wonderful oh thanks for your comment on "Onion Face Peel" made my day complete ;)

    Althea~
    | Posted on 2011-10-03 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      This is of course one of the Three
    Great reasons poetry was invented.
    Women and Fighting being the others.
    Of course Fighting over a woman while
    Drinking now there is some inspiration.
    I think that like that 'worlds greatest country
    song' says, mothers, trucks and trains.
    you should try and work in women and
    fighting to have perhaps the worlds greatest
    whiskey poem.

    | Posted on 2011-09-24 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      Although I mostly tanqueray,
    with bourbon I have had my way
    and woke up feeling great dismay
    about my disarray... ;)

    | Posted on 2011-08-30 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem since it comes from the bottom of the heart and not from bottom of bourbon time.

    I myself prefer Cognac Camus. Same glow same difference me thinks.

    Love the poem. Keep straight.
    Joachim
    | Posted on 2011-07-16 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      I utterly enjoyed reading this aloud, especially the first three stanzas. The images are captivating and sucks the reader right in to enjoy life, enjoy this piece.

    I think you've lost some of the strength in rhyming with stanza 4, 5, and 6. I wasn't as captivated as the first three. But, you've redeemed yourself with the last stanza. My only thought for changes are those three weak stanzas in the middle. I felt there wasn't enough to blow me away like when you started of.

    Still, as I said, I loved reading this aloud. It was a pleasant ride to read your work.

    Cheers,
    | Posted on 2011-07-14 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the rhythm, balance, flow and tone of this time. It was an ode to carefree life too. Written masterfully.

    In my view, it cant be improved. Pretty fine bourbon, what a glowing spirit!
    | Posted on 2011-07-14 00:00:00 | by Kaddish | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this, not just as a toast to the kentucky bourbon itself, but to life lived in the right way...making every sip of life count...

    we learn where the bourbon came from but also the idea of savoring where we come from...our roots, what makes us us.

    that is important...really important and we can toast that.

    i really liked what you did with the rhymes in each stanza...each is like a separate tip of the glass, a separate sip...but it really works as a total ingestion of the bottle/poem.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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