This is of course one of the Three
Great reasons poetry was invented.
Women and Fighting being the others.
Of course Fighting over a woman while
Drinking now there is some inspiration.
I think that like that 'worlds greatest country
song' says, mothers, trucks and trains.
you should try and work in women and
fighting to have perhaps the worlds greatest
I utterly enjoyed reading this aloud, especially the first three stanzas. The images are captivating and sucks the reader right in to enjoy life, enjoy this piece.
I think you've lost some of the strength in rhyming with stanza 4, 5, and 6. I wasn't as captivated as the first three. But, you've redeemed yourself with the last stanza. My only thought for changes are those three weak stanzas in the middle. I felt there wasn't enough to blow me away like when you started of.
Still, as I said, I loved reading this aloud. It was a pleasant ride to read your work.