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    dots Submission Name: Piranha Feathersdots
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    Author: EshyFishy
    ASL Info:    21yo mess having crises
    Elite Ratio:    6.92 - 126/123/57
    Words: 31
    Class/Type: Spoof/Satire
    Total Views: 800
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 286



    Description:
       Nonsense poem. Not meant to make sense.

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    dotsPiranha Feathersdots
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    Fishbones made of jelly
    Forests without trees
    Ships sailing on land
    Sinking suns
    Happy times
    Ripe hours
    Flying fish
    Walking worms
    Perfect people
    Warless worlds
    Scars without stories
    Piranhas shedding feathers.




    Submitted on 2011-07-13 23:34:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nothing to correct, nothing to state.

    It's just something you gotta pass by, read, and leave. (:
    | Posted on 2011-09-17 00:00:00 | by Debauchery | [ Reply to This ]
      For a poem that makes no sense, this makes a lot of sense. But then again, you probably knew that :D

    I love the play of words here. It's so well crafted. There isn't much written but the pictures flow effortlessly into my mind.

    I picture a forest, but the forest doesn't have any trees. I see a ship, but it's sailing on land. I see worms, and they have legs.

    In the world we live in, this would make no sense. But in the world we imagine, this makes sense.

    Love the title. It's so catchy and so cute. I want a pet piranha with feathers :)

    Cheers,
    | Posted on 2011-07-15 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      oh those cute piranhas flying in circles...why are there so many and why do they look like frenzied geeze...

    i love all the contradictions in this...in a perfect world...we could fly...and ships Would sail on land...

    the title is enticing...the poem is clever---

    i like unusual. i like this

    too bad it got buried so fast...wow, some of these folks are just posting a zillion poems all at once---and life is short on the board...

    wish this could get more looks...i would recommend reposting it...so more would see it...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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