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"Tears Of An Angel"

Author: Ron Cole
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Dedicated to the memory of little Caylee Anthony; ...... while a nation mourns

"Tears Of An Angel"

She wept with tears of an Angel
as white clouds billowed by
she had just arrived in Heaven
and felt so alone in the Sky.

She loved and missed her mother
but her mother wasn't there
she was concerned with earthly matters
and didn't seem to care.

She could hear the harps in Heaven
Saintly music played everywhere
but she loved and missed her mother
who didn't seem to care.

So she wept with Angel tears
and felt cold and so alone
she knew not what had happened
or why Heaven was now her home.

Ron Cole
July 2011

Submitted on 2011-07-14 16:50:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  WOW !! You left me in tears. And speechless. The passion. It's not easy to put forth the pain and love in such a way. That it would make the angels cry.
| Posted on 2012-03-28 00:00:00 | by illusions35904 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is such an original piece. It was so pretty, a piece of artwork. Great flow.

Th personification of an angel is such a fantastic idea and you present it beautifully, longing is something so easy to relate to, and it really embraces the idea of home with humanity, with love, that heaven and nirvana and home are not a place but with this angel but the relationship with her mother. And I think that is a universal concept.

Great write, what a pleasure.
| Posted on 2011-09-30 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
  Again Ron, you strike a chord with the reader. Very poignant and stirs the emotions.

| Posted on 2011-08-23 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow! This is truly beautiful. I can't really say much more than that...
| Posted on 2011-08-05 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
  Our youngest great-grand-daughter is Kaylee, she too is loved by all who know her. No child should be alone in heaven and I'm sure little Caylee is resting in the arms of our LORD, not lonly at all, but perhaps happy for the first time.
I pray her mother is innocent, not just not guilty, for any mother to harm such a child is dispicable indeed.
What a lovky tribute to a little lost lamb.
| Posted on 2011-07-31 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
  An exceptionally well-written tribute to this poor, innocent life snuffed out far too soon....I love how you use repetition in the second and third stanzas to drive home the horrible coldness of casey's indifference.

Great write....hauntingly beautiful.
| Posted on 2011-07-16 00:00:00 | by rubie | [ Reply to This ]
  wow, Ron, this is such a poignant timely piece of writing...and really captures the sadness we all feel for Caylee....that poor little girl...

followed part of the trial....ugh...what a mother she wasn't.

beautiful writing.

| Posted on 2011-07-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
  oh I totally didn't read the description. Now it makes a little more sense. She is free from her mother rather than gone from her. Oh well I like my first impression the best :)
| Posted on 2011-07-14 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this. It's sad for the reader, but not sad for the character. She doesn't remember anything from her life, and therefore cannot be sad, but there is that feeling of empty inside her as she misses her mother and all.

I like this one good write.
| Posted on 2011-07-14 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]

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