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    dots Submission Name: Teardots
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    Author: vedanta19
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    A little tear delicately stumbles,
    merges into a pale wrinkles of a flushed face;

    rethinking,
    pondering,
    begging;

    when,
    where -

    love stayed for a while
    and left;

    my feeble heartbeat helplessly
    fades -

    in chorus of -
    circus-like
    prisoned life;

    trafficking thoughts, resistant sombre moments -
    of loneliness;

    I yearn to go somewhere

    where

    simplicity reigns the jigsaw of unrest;

    I attempt to converse,
    you seem so far, breaking my heart -
    all over again;

    I wonder if you are here to stay
    or
    to mirror a past of sorrowful twilights;

    I forsee no end,
    where confusion clouds my thoughts;

    love should be supreme,
    faint slowly,

    leaving me bare,

    unloved and alone.






    Submitted on 2011-07-16 10:17:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "breaking my heart all over again; I wonder if you are here to stay or to mirror my past of sorrowful twilights.."

    i love this, and can certainly relate. in the realm of love and passion, and in the throws of love, we are so blinded...even to making the same mistakes over and over again....

    also love the contrast of "pale bareness of flushed face"...that flush of passion is nicely juxtaposed with the paleness suggestive of purity and innocence.

    nice write....
    | Posted on 2011-07-16 00:00:00 | by rubie | [ Reply to This ]
      a tear is more complex than we realize...it is borne of something...and then has a journey...and then ends up in a place where dreams are broken.

    i like the line ron referred to also...i especially liked the "jigsaw of unrest"

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved:

    "where love stayed for a while
    and left;"

    that just seems to sum so many love affairs in life; we are wanderes across the land, searching for a perfect soulmate.....something which is extremely rare and difficult to find. And, so, there are many hesitancies along the way, sampling and searching...only to discover that this isn't it, and journey on..

    Haven't seen you at the site for awhile; nice to see you back and posting again!



    | Posted on 2011-07-16 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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