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    dots Submission Name: Mr. Brittle Bones & Ms. Head Shotdots
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    Author: snacky fish
    ASL Info:    31/male/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 377/472/111
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 575
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    Description:
       Another Mr. Brittle Bones poem. Just a character I drempt up and write about once in a while.


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    dotsMr. Brittle Bones & Ms. Head Shotdots
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    Insidious and morose
    Is Mr. Brittle Bones bitter ghost
    A skeleton once was he
    Able to frown, freak, and flee

    That was until
    His brains took a little spill
    Spattered about and around
    With out a shot or a sound

    Now an apparition like mist
    With out finger or fist
    Too shake or flick
    No bones to clack or click

    It was Ms. Head Shot
    Well armed, deadly, and hot
    One pull of her feather trigger
    She made his head less bigger

    Poor Mr. Brittle Bones's head
    With out it he's quiet and dead
    Yet he still wonders the most
    Could Ms. Head Shot ever love a ghost?




    Submitted on 2011-07-16 17:49:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "My morbid heart loves this"
    That's a quote from you lol

    I only saw this when I clicked your profile. It's like your poems aren't showing up or something. Weird. I'll check back often, though.
    | Posted on 2011-07-22 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Fun and dark, love it. It flows nicely, rolls right off the tongue.
    It lacks defined imagery and is short, but still very well written.

    Keep up the good work and I'll keep reading.

    H
    | Posted on 2011-07-16 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      reminds me of a line in "the outsiders"

    matt dillon as Dallas said it..."man, that girl hates me...do you think she might like me a little?"

    the love hate relationships we sometimes have...there is love but so much friction we just can't live together...and one or the other of the pair will shoot the other down...blow them away with words...

    end the relationship...

    not literally...but i feel this piece is meant figuratively....nice humor in it.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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