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    dots Submission Name: Aftersdots
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    Author: Dead Bell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Ire
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 48/129/125
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAftersdots
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    Now we sit in fill the ecstasy
    Swallowing flesh like batter
    Engulfing life in pleasantry
    Our days are made to flatter

    Everything intimate, talking fresh
    Winding into walking tours
    Exclaiming breaths bedroom thresh
    All breaths I want are yours

    Evening into scented noon
    Thoughts spun and woven
    Wrapping up away the moon
    Until our love is proven

    After now the same lines said
    But sweet awhile they sway
    Until retreat into the head
    We’ll meet without delay




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      this one had nice flow and rhyme
    nice
    | Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]


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