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Submission Name:
Afters
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Author:
Dead Bell
ASL Info:
23/m/Ire
Elite Ratio:
2.42 - 48/129/125
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166
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Poetry/Misc
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Afters
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Now we sit in fill the ecstasy
Swallowing flesh like batter
Engulfing life in pleasantry
Our days are made to flatter
Everything intimate, talking fresh
Winding into walking tours
Exclaiming breaths bedroom thresh
All breaths I want are yours
Evening into scented noon
Thoughts spun and woven
Wrapping up away the moon
Until our love is proven
After now the same lines said
But sweet awhile they sway
Until retreat into the head
We’ll meet without delay
Submitted on 2011-07-17 09:23:50
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this one had nice flow and rhyme
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| Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by
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