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    dots Submission Name: What is love then?dots

    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWhat is love then?dots

    Love is
    me pulling the dagger from my face
    and handing it back to you
    in mint condition as if never used.

    Love is
    a fight againts the tide of hate
    stirring a torrent of snakes at you,
    a smile resurrected instead,anew.

    Love is
    a dangerous passion to all
    not in resonance to its soft madness,
    we are but fools, fragile instruments.

    Love is
    the heart of the soul, an unstopping
    force waiting to curb the snakes
    churning in our insides..

    Love is
    a wild-card injected into the sinews
    of reality, the rainbow grease we see
    smudged on the lips of the victorious.

    Love just is.


    Submitted on 2011-07-18 06:16:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love is madness! :) Although I never really thought of analyzing it like that.
    | Posted on 2011-07-19 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the use of slant rhyme/ near rhyme in this...i like the juxtaposition of the negative offset by the positive...

    i might consider using something different than snakes, the second time around--in 4th stanza...it feels redundant--and since the other allusions are not brought back, maybe some different analogy could be used there.

    otherwise...a fine piece of writing...stirs the feelings.

    | Posted on 2011-07-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      For all this I laid to my heart and indeed to investigate all this, that the righteous, and the wise, and their works, are in the hand of God; man knoweth neither love nor hatred: all is before them.
    Book of Solomon.

    | Posted on 2011-07-18 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]

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